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钢铁行业变化

Steel Industry Changes
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🏷️ 数据图📋 ID: 023📝 词数 180

📝 题目

The graphs below show the changes in the UK steel industry between 1970 and 2000.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

钢铁行业变化

✍️ 参考范文

The two line graphs illustrate developments in the UK steel sector over the 30-year period from 1970 to 2000, in terms of supply, demand and employment. Overall, both total UK steel demand and domestic production saw substantial declines, while imports of steel rose considerably over the period. In addition, the workforce in the UK steel industry shrank dramatically. In 1970, total UK demand for steel stood at 200,000 units, compared to 165,000 units produced domestically and a low of just 10,000 units of imported steel. By 2000, UK steel demand had halved to exactly 100,000 units, while domestic production also fell by almost half to 80,000 units. By contrast, imports had increased eightfold to reach 75,000 units by the end of the timeframe, closing the initial gap between domestic supply and total demand. Employment in the industry also plummeted over the same period, starting at 50,000 workers in 1970. This figure dropped to 40,000 by 1980, then fell more steeply to 21,000 in 1990, before ending at around 17,000 workers in 2000, less than a third of the 1970 level.

审题定位
该题为雅思学术类写作Part1静态+动态数据结合题,核心是总结1970-2000年英国钢铁行业的变化,涵盖两类数据:钢铁价值相关的供需、进口量,以及行业就业人数。
开头段
改写题目,说明两个图表分别展示的内容和时间范围。
概述段
提炼核心总体趋势:本土需求、产量、就业人数均下降,只有进口量显著上升。
主体第一段
描述价值变化的折线图,分别对比三类指标的起点数值、变化过程、终点数值,重点突出下降和上升的对比,以及数值差距的变化。
主体第二段
描述就业人数的面积折线图,按时间节点说明就业人数的持续下降趋势,通过倍数对比体现跌幅幅度。
数据选取抓关键节点
1970、1980、1990、2000四个关键年份的数值,避免堆砌无关数据。
对比逻辑清晰
对下降项(需求、产量、就业)和上升项(进口)做明确对比,同时通过起点终点的比例关系(如进口量8倍增长、就业人数仅剩最初的1/3)突出变化幅度,满足“做相关对比”的要求。
时态统一
描述1970-2000的过去数据全程使用一般过去时,符合时态规范。
词汇替换
避免重复使用“下降”,搭配使用decline/fall/shrink/plummet/halve等词;“上升”使用rise/increase,提升表达丰富度。
合规检查
没有添加主观推断,所有内容均来自图表数据;核心特征无遗漏,对比关系清晰。