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行业就业

Employment By Sector
数据图小作文
🏷️ 数据图📋 ID: 073📝 词数 173

📝 题目

The chart below shows the number of people employed in five types of work in one region of Australia in 2001 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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✍️ 参考范文

The bar chart compares how many people were employed in five different sectors (sales, accounting, computing, nursing and farming) in a particular region of Australia in 2001 and 2008. Overall, sales was the largest employment sector in both years, while farming had the fewest workers. While employment figures rose for sales, computing and nursing over the period, the number of people working in accounting and farming declined. In 2001, around 155,000 people were employed in sales, and this figure increased to nearly 170,000 by 2008, remaining the highest among the five categories. Computing saw the most significant growth, from roughly 58,000 workers to around 80,000. There was also a small rise in the number of nurses, from about 57,000 to just over 60,000. By contrast, the number of people working in accounting fell from approximately 67,000 to 58,000. The biggest drop was seen in farming, where the employment figure nearly halved from 30,000 in 2001 to only 18,000 in 2008, making it the least popular sector by the end of the period. (全文,符合字数要求)

开头段
改写题目,明确图表核心内容,说明对比的维度(年份、行业)。
小作文为动态柱状图,核心是对比2001和2008年澳大利亚某地区五个行业的就业人数,采用标准三段/四段结构。
概述段
总结最核心的整体特征:① 销售业一直是就业人数最多的行业,农业人数始终最少;② 销售、计算机、护理行业就业人数上升,会计、农业人数下降。
细节段
分两组对比数据,先描述上升的行业:给出销售业的具体数值变化,点明计算机行业涨幅最大,再说明护理的小幅增长;之后描述下降的行业:会计行业的人数下滑,点明农业跌幅最大、始终是就业人数最少的行业。
无需逐个机械罗列所有数据,重点提取极值(最多/最少、涨幅最大/跌幅最大),同时做好同行业两年间的对比、不同行业间的规模对比。
数值表达采用近似表述(around, roughly, approximately, nearly等),符合小作文描述图表的学术规范,避免过度精确的误读。
衔接与逻辑
使用overall, while, by contrast等连接词清晰区分趋势,逻辑连贯;词汇上重复替换employment/worker/figure等词,避免重复,时态统一使用一般过去时匹配过去年份的时间背景。
涵盖了所有核心特征,没有冗余信息。