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自雇就业比较

Self-employment Comparison
数据图小作文
🏷️ 数据图📋 ID: 051📝 词数 194

📝 题目

The graph below shows the percentage of self-employed workers in the total workforce in five countries in 1998 and 2008.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Self-employment Comparison

✍️ 参考范文

The bar chart compares five countries (namely the Russian Republic, Slovakia, the Czech Republic, Greece, and Turkey) in terms of the share of self-employed workers in their total workforce, in 1998 and 2008. Overall, Turkey had the highest proportion of self-employed people in both years, while the lowest figure was recorded in the Russian Republic. It is also noticeable that the share of self-employed workers increased in the first three listed countries over the period, but fell in Greece and Turkey. In 1998, over half of the workforce in Turkey was self-employed, the highest among the five countries, compared to 43% in Greece. By contrast, less than 15% of working people were self-employed in the Czech Republic, Slovakia and the Russian Republic, with the lowest rate (only 5%) found in Russia. By 2008, the percentage of self-employed workers in Turkey had dropped to 40%, which was slightly higher than that in Greece (36%). Meanwhile, there were small rises in self-employment rates in the other three countries: the figure for Slovakia rose to nearly 13%, while that for the Czech Republic grew to 16%. Russia remained the country with the lowest share, at around 8%.

审题与结构规划
这是雅思动态柱状图小作文,写作任务是总结信息、提取核心特征并做相关对比。写作结构分为四段:开头段改写题干,概述段总结整体最值和变化趋势,主体段分别对1998年、2008年的数据进行分组对比,符合雅思写作评分的任务回应要求。
首先纠正图表的明显印刷错误
图例把第二个年份标为2000,和题干给出的1998/2008时间矛盾,按照题干时间写作。
概述段提炼两个核心特征
第一,土耳其始终是自雇比例最高的国家,俄罗斯始终最低;第二,俄罗斯、斯洛伐克、捷克三个中欧/东欧国家自雇比例上升,而希腊、土耳其两个南欧/西亚国家自雇比例下降,清晰覆盖整体趋势,不遗漏核心特征。
主体第一段描述1998年数据
按照数据大小分组,把高比例的土耳其、希腊分为一组,低比例的另外三个国家分为一组,对比数据差异,避免逐个罗列数据。
主体第二段描述2008年数据
对比希腊和土耳其的数值下降后的差异,再描述另外三个国家的小幅上升,最后点明俄罗斯仍然是最低值,完成所有相关对比。
语言与表达
使用同义替换(如percentage替换为share/proportion/rate,self-employed workers替换为self-employed people/self-employment),使用对比连接词(by contrast, meanwhile, compared to, while等)体现逻辑。