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大学选择原因

University Choice Reasons
数据图小作文
🏷️ 数据图📋 ID: 069📝 词数 188

📝 题目

The charts below show the main reasons why students chose a particular university in the UK in 1997 and 2007.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

大学选择原因

✍️ 参考范文

The two pie charts compare five key factors that influenced UK students’ choice of university in 1997 and 2007. Overall, suitable degree courses remained the most common reason for selecting a university across both years, while the importance of sports and social activities declined sharply over the decade. Meanwhile, proximity to parental home saw a dramatic rise in popularity. In 1997, over a third of students (35%) chose a university for its suitable degree courses, and this figure rose slightly to 37% in 2007. The second most influential factor in 1997 was quality of resources, at 21%, though this dropped to 17% by 2007. Good sports and social activities were the reason for 19% of students in 1997, but this share plummeted to just 6% ten years later, making it the least cited reason in 2007. By contrast, proximity to parental home more than doubled in importance, from 10% in 1997 to 22% in 2007, when it became the second most common consideration. There was also a small increase in the share of students choosing a university for quality of teaching, from 15% to 18% over the period.

结构规划
雅思小作文为动态饼图,遵循“改写题目-概述总体特征-分述细节对比”的结构。
开头改写
将原题的show the main reasons why students chose改写为compare five key factors that influenced UK students’ choice of university,明确对比两个年份、五个择校原因,完成题目引入。
概述段(overview)写作
提炼3个核心趋势:① 始终占比最高的因素是“合适的学位课程”;② 下降最显著的是“体育社交活动”;③ 上升最显著的是“离家近”,清晰呈现图表最核心的整体特征,满足评分中“overview清晰”的要求。
首先描述占比最高的项目
合适的学位课程两年都是第一位,从35%微涨到37%,突出其主导地位。
接下来描述下降的项目
资源质量从21%降到17%;体育社交活动从19%暴跌到6%,成为2007年占比最低的原因,用plummeted体现变化幅度。
最后描述上升的项目
离家近的占比从10%翻倍到22%,成为2007年第二大原因;教学质量小幅从15%涨到18%,完成所有数据的对比,覆盖所有项目,没有遗漏关键信息,同时进行了同一年份内、不同年份间的相关比较,符合题目要求。
词汇与语法上,使用了remained, declined sharply, dramatic rise, plummeted, slightly, more than doubled等多样的变化描述词汇,同时运用了过去时为主的正确时态,比较级、最高级、状语从句等多样语法结构,符合雅思写作评分标准。